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I feel that the screenplay has potential but stops short of good because of the many times I've seen the plot. Revenge is a hard bit of stew to cook. The trials of people in wheelchairs are overlooked. Bitter is the emotion I feel you touch upon the most, but frustration and day to day life of a wheel chair bound person where not touched upon. Think of being in giant maze,...
I feel that the screenplay has potential but stops short of good because of the many times I've seen the plot. Revenge is a hard bit of stew to cook. The trials of people in wheelchairs are overlooked. Bitter is the emotion I feel you touch upon the most, but frustration and day to day life of a wheel chair bound person where not touched upon. Think of being in giant maze, crotch level to everyone else, forced to be patient where everyone else gets to hurry, Jackson needs to be more three demensional. Kate needs to be more human and the entire maid getting knocked up by rich guy feels wrong for this screenplay (more of a soap opera script). I liked the visuals, especially with the drinking scenes.
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I enjoyed the soundtrack. It kept the pace flowing. The black and white shadowy film was nice too. It was overall upbeat and easy to watch. The tree wasn't my favorite as far as visuals go, but the train tracks were pretty cool. I dnt know much about 16mm but I thought you did a good job.
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I have watched a whole bunch of "documentary's" on this site that I really wouldn't consider true documentary material. This one however was very true to documentary film. Ray is a delight to watch and listen to. He is an inspiration and I am so glad that you gave us an opppertunity to get to know him......keep up the good work
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This wasn't a common topic for short film, which is nice for a change. No moral debates, no sappy love story, just one man's erotic desire. I liked the theme, but the film was very dark, making it hard to see. I know that the point was a dark secret but the lighting did need to be turned up a notch. Good job and good concept.
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This piece screams "After school special." Remember those? They were a few years before cable. They covered all sorts of teen problems from drug abuse to pregnancy to gay teen natzi shooting spree's. This short would fall right into the catagory with the rest of the teen angst. I would have liked it alot better if I were fifteen years younger. Your audience is definaitly on...
This piece screams "After school special." Remember those? They were a few years before cable. They covered all sorts of teen problems from drug abuse to pregnancy to gay teen natzi shooting spree's. This short would fall right into the catagory with the rest of the teen angst. I would have liked it alot better if I were fifteen years younger. Your audience is definaitly on the younger side with this one. This isnt a slam, teenagers make up the majority of the viewing public.
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I enjoyed this piece very much. It gave me the feeling of watching old reel to reel home movies from a projector. It was short and got the point across in a sentimental (but not Hallmark card) way. Veterans Day was just a week or two ago so this movie was very fitting to watch . Keep up the good work.
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What a fun ride you have taken us on. I liked the actors that you have chosen for this piece. They made the whole piece. I was reading your production notes about the trouble with the music. I am having a simular experience with a book I'm working on. It's near impossible to get the okay to use any piece of music. But I'm glad it all worked out for you, the finished product...
What a fun ride you have taken us on. I liked the actors that you have chosen for this piece. They made the whole piece. I was reading your production notes about the trouble with the music. I am having a simular experience with a book I'm working on. It's near impossible to get the okay to use any piece of music. But I'm glad it all worked out for you, the finished product was nice.
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I had watched another one of your pieces (.25). So I went in search of the rest of your work hoping I would enjoy them as well. Frankly, I was a bit disapointed. You never let your actors act. Everything plays out like a music video. Dialogue can be the most challenging part of the film, and you havent even given it a try. Might want to give your actors a chance to do their...
I had watched another one of your pieces (.25). So I went in search of the rest of your work hoping I would enjoy them as well. Frankly, I was a bit disapointed. You never let your actors act. Everything plays out like a music video. Dialogue can be the most challenging part of the film, and you havent even given it a try. Might want to give your actors a chance to do their jobs next time.
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This piece had visual appeal, but the story or poem was lost on me. It had a beautiful comercial style and the soft colors gave a ghost like feeling. I didnt care for the poetry. It would have been better for me if you had chosen different wording or descriptives. The music was nice and fit well with the visuals.
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Some parts of this piece were too dark to see. I couldnt tell if it was lighting issues or how it got uploaded, but that took away from it a bit. Also it sounded a bit as though Jennifer were reading from a script instead of speaking from her heart. Good effort.
