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I want to thank Triggerstreet for providing an outlet for my creativity. I have learned so much from my participation here and continue to learn something new every time I read a sreenplay. My short story The Modern Classic has turned into...


I want to thank Triggerstreet for providing an outlet for my creativity. I have learned so much from my participation here and continue to learn something new every time I read a sreenplay. My short story The Modern Classic has turned into a novella. 100 pages pdf I have not let anyone read it yet. If you are interested please email. Below is more information. The Modern Classic is a semi-autobiographical, stream of conscious, existentialist, satire told in a non-linear fashion. Synopsis: Unsure of whether he is indeed an omnipotent being or merely suffering from paranoid delusions and multiple personality disorder, God struggles to find himself in the modern world. Summary: God finds himself disillusioned with his position and his place as he realizes people simply don’t believe in him. However as a consequence of being God he is unable to do the one thing he wants most, to escape. As a result his favorite past-time has become inhabiting humans so that he can experience life through their eyes. One day he inhabits a young girl, Miriam, and finds her different. God faces the uncontrollable desire to communicate with her, to make himself known, something he had never done before. His disillusionment with what he considers his failure becomes so great that he delves deeper into Miriam’s mind, creating worlds for the two of them to inhabit, something else he had never done before. Unfortunately as a result of having God in her head all the time, Miriam develops multiple personalities that not only speak to her but to God as well. Initially entertained, God soon finds the presence of the Other is something totally outside his control. He flees back to the real world only to find that the Other has followed and now claims to be God just as much as God is. But there can be only one true God and now God must find a way to rid himself of the Other. The central theme is the desire to escape, to escape from one’s responsibilities, from one’s self. The story is told in five parts dealing with the Other, experiences through Miriam, the solution to the problem and its outcome. The story is told mainly from the perspective of God, but at times it is Miriam’s viewpoint that comes through. At other times the perspective shifts between God and Miriam’s, and sometimes God views himself as someone separate and talks of God in the third person. Each part contains chapters which are stories separate from other chapters however the subject matter of the chapters within each part are all continuations tying them all together. Contained within each chapter are “bits” or “routines” complete with punch lines. In part one the short introductory chapter is followed by a more heavy handed philosophy laden section. Parts two and three evolve into more storytelling, and part four takes a dark and unexpected turn, only to dump you out into an inconclusive end. The story contains a critical examination of not only the homeless situation, but also organized religion and its doctrines including the effect technology has on spiritualism, the death of Christ, the opulent and incestuous nature of the Catholic church, the flood and finally to Armageddon. This examination ultimately poses the question, Why does God allow death, famine, natural disasters, etc., and questions God’s need for blind faith. But ultimately the story is about the desire to escape what you are and the inability to do so. And as described in the first pages, the thin line between creator and created becomes blurred. God slips so deeply into the illusion of being something else that he finds himself unsure of true reality. He reiterates the slogan “There is no truth”, derived from the conclusion that truth is but a matter of perception in order to allow himself to believe that he can be Miriam, that he can experience life as her. She in turn comes to wonder if God’s existence is real or if he is simply one of the Others. She comes to wonder if she didn’t create all of it in her head, which is actually a plausible explanation. One can argue that this is a not so straightforward account of God experiencing some severe mental health issues, but one might also speculate that continued references to “the children” might indicate that there is more at hand. Are we experiencing the deterioration of a woman in crisis as she finds herself unable to cope with reality and contemplating suicide? Are we witnessing first hand god like delusions of grandeur as a mechanism to deal with an overwhelming dissatisfaction being played out by multiple personalities? The suggestion of and continuing presence of paranoia as a theme and the shifting perspective the story is told from might support this line of thinking. Whatever the case one thing is obvious, be this an omnipotent being or a mere human, and that is the struggle of find oneself, to find meaning to existence where none is foreseeable. This is a struggle we all share in the modern world. It’s a more private struggle in The Modern Classic.

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  • A review of The Dolphin Hotel
    by mpet on 01/29/2012
    There is an interesting idea at the core of this piece, and I definitely see where you are trying to go with it. I like the repetition of the lines, "...I realized that if you spend long enough with your eyes closed you forget the world exists. You begin to wonder what you will find when you open them." and, "The longer I was in the darkness the harder it became to believe... read
  • by mpet on 01/29/2012
    Very interesting story. Great intro that held a nice little surprise at its end. Didn't see that coming. Or the next reversal either. This was all very clever, very well constructed. And I love the lines book ending the story. I would like to see more development as far as Raven is concerned. I'd like to know more about what drove her to this point. How she anguished... read
  • A review of Spirit On The Slab
    by mpet on 01/28/2012
    This was an interesting read, very stylistic, loved the shifting perspective. It was a nice glimpse into each mind, seeing how each saw the situation. Not a pretty picture and apparently the grass isn't always greener on the other sidem Structurally you've got something very unique and it works well. The concept is fresh and the story is engaging, leaving you wondering... read
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Comments About mpet 33

  • gulfcoastomega on 02/04/2012

    Hey M.

    Thank you for taking the time to review two of my stories.

    Your thoughts and comments are appreciated.

    Stay frosty

  • lizzayn on 02/02/2012

    Thanks for the review of Innocent When You Dream. I appreciate the feedback!
  • MaxWatt on 01/30/2012

    Thanks for the review, I'm glad you liked it. I'm hoping that story is done now, bar a few small tweaks, but my fingers are crossed. Again, thanks. Time and effort is, as always, appreciated!
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