patrick thompson 

member since 04/28/2003 | last login 12/16/2012

write, rewrite, rewrite again. Hope that it comes out better than I imagined....

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write, rewrite, rewrite again. Hope that it comes out better than I imagined.

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    A review of Penis Envy (NEW DRAFT)
    by patrick thompson on 10/31/2012
    While i like the idea of a talking cock... i found this to be a fairly standard romantic comedy with nods to Judd Apatow that never delivered on the promise of a raunchy adult rom-com. Below are the comments I made while reading the script. Good luck with this and future projects. _______________________________________ 1. I have no idea he has a problem with his penis... read
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    A review of The Wrong Day
    by patrick thompson on 02/12/2010
    I enjoyed reading this story but imagine that i will soon forget it. While it was well written there was nothing in the story to really grab my attention. But that's okay. Not everything should be flashy and throat squeezing. A couple of sentences could use a little tightening and the meter maid's dialogue seemed to be missing a word - but otherwise a fine read. i look forward... read
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    A review of First Contact
    by patrick thompson on 02/10/2010
    This was a tight and well written story. Sure, a few sentences could be edited but overall not bad. My only major grip is that the "twist" was predictable from the first page. By not giving the aliens names you have given the reader a reason to suspect your decision. "Surely, this writer would name his characters... unless, that would give away the twist". and from there I'm... read
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  • Unknownwriter9
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    Unknownwriter9 on 12/30/2011

    Ty for the review of Eros-Apollo, The Sun God, It sounds like the more subtle title didn't work as planned. I am still working on the format, ty for the comments. Yes Apollo should not know, he's more of the stupid jock type and very ego centered, I guess I did not make that clear. It is a comedy, action, sci-fi/fantasy, and damn it coming from a GOD sounded funny to me, it is coming clearer that I didn't write it well enough to be funny or it just misses and will end up on the floor, so to speak. Anyway It is in the process (as it is my first SP) and will be for the next couple of weeks, TY for the time you did spend-Unknownwriter9
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    CMeziere on 06/28/2009

    No problem. :) Thanks, and good luck to you too!

    Chris
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    write4life on 01/12/2009

    thanks for the email! i found your honest notes very helpful.

    i was hoping you could help me with a question (if you don't mind) .. should i change the setting?

    a poor community, where if a monster attacks, not being able to use guns would draw interest away from the audience .. right? the audience loves guns or missiles being shot at monsters .. right? was it the setting that pulled you out?

    but then again a Cyclops seems more at home in a poor setting than in a city like chicago. what do you think?
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