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  capper on 01/17/2011

  Thanks for the review of Thrice. I appreciate your time and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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  Campo on 01/17/2011

  Thanks for your comment about why you removed my script. It's decent of you to tell me that. Good luck with your writing.
  Campo
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  **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 01/16/2011

  its in my assignment queue...

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Comments About Phantom Writer 12

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  capper on 01/17/2011

  Thanks for the review of Thrice. I appreciate your time and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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  Campo on 01/17/2011

  Thanks for your comment about why you removed my script. It's decent of you to tell me that. Good luck with your writing.
  Campo
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  **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 01/16/2011

  its in my assignment queue...
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  davidmcewing on 01/14/2011

  Thanks for your very detailed review of 'Year of the Snake.' This is one of the most extensive reviews I have ever had. It's the first draft, so I expected a lot of flaws and errors to pop up. You did a good job finding them.
  I gathered you liked Fong even more than you hated Felix. (She's all yours for a couple bazookas.)
  You're right that some of the operational scenes could be eliminated. I was trying to give the audience a little history lesson about a war that cost more French lives than did the later American body count.
  
  Thanks again. You're on your way to Reviewer of the Month.
  
  Dave
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  Paul Clarke on 01/12/2011

  Thanks for the review. Great insight. Plenty to work on for the next draft.
  
  I'll really have to work on the balance of making the story understandable, but still a little mysterious and twisty. I don't want it to be telegraphed the whole way, but clearly it's a little too tricky at the moment. Glad you like the characters.
  
  Thanks again, really appreciated.
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  Cenydd Ros on 01/11/2011

  Thanks for the very in depth review. It's a long one! I have a more recent verson of this script posted, but will be leaving the earlier version (that you read) up for a while yet.
  
  All the best,
  ~ C. Ros
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  Nathan on 03/17/2010

  Thanks a lot for your thought out review! I've taken your comments seriously and will prepare for a rewrite. I know its walking different ground but the confusion is intended to mirror the confusing place the world really is. We tend to accept it and look for meaning, which most of the characters do (with science, religion or art), or (like Prince) simply make the most of it and pursue money. Norman wants recognition and entertainment, he represents those who simply pass time with contrived challenges and don't really care about bigger things.
  
  Ultimately we won't know entirely and should join ourselves to the voice within that walks through the world with us, and is like us but also leads on us on a path of good. Call it conscience, the Holy Spirit, heart or simply the universe or fate.
  
  But it obviously needs more grounding and brought a little more into a place of sense to get the buy in. The first two people who looked at the script understood it but then they know what I'm like! Most trigger reviews have just gone "eh?".
  
  I think a better intro narration and a bit more explanation would go a long way to bring the audience along with what the story is about.
  
  Thanks again!
  
  Nathan
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  Agent Cooper on 03/06/2010

  Phantom Writer wrote:

  Hey Agent Cooper,
  
  I thought you'd be showing up on my doorstep with a loaded twenty two after my review.
  
  Believe me when I tell you, you can write a sp, I just didn't like that one, but hey, who am I?
  Looks like a lot of other people enjoyed it so mine is just an opinion.
  
  Thanks for posting your stuff.
  
  PW

  
  
  Heh, hee. I considered the loaded shotgun...
  
  Seriously though, I can't really complain about an intelligent, well thought out assessment, even if I don't particularly agree with some of the points. It's a big effort to write such a thorough review and I appreciate it.
  
  And it is always nice to hear someone thinks you can write, even if this isn't the one for them.
  
  Thanks again
  
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  Agent Cooper on 03/05/2010

  Thanks for taking the time to review Exit Strategies. I don't agree, but I appreciate you taking the time.
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  jwest on 06/23/2008

  Sorry Phants - didn't see your thread there in Extended. Have replied to the first one there. :D
  
  Happy writing! :)

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