Phil Maker 

member since 04/07/2007 | last login 11/27/2007

I'm a Screenwiter/Director from Florida, now living in West Hollywood. I wrote, shot and am now editing my first film. I'm married to a famous author/screenwriter from Finland. I look forward to a long and productive career in the entertainment industry. I...

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I'm a Screenwiter/Director from Florida, now living in West Hollywood. I wrote, shot and am now editing my first film. I'm married to a famous author/screenwriter from Finland. I look forward to a long and productive career in the entertainment industry. I write from the heart.

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Reviews by Phil Maker 5

  • by Phil Maker on 09/18/2007
    Starts off a little bit awkward. The way itís written A COTTAGE and SHORE. Itís jarring to read that way. Try it as a mini slug line like this: A COTTAGE -- sits perched a... Description is a bit awkward -- ...damn proud of its four street lights? How do we know? How does the camera SEE that itís damn proud? I donít think youíre conveying the exact meaning you want to convey... read
  • A review of Crime Line
    by Phil Maker on 09/11/2007
    The script starts off by saying they ď...surround the scene of the crimeĒ What crime? You can only write precisely what we see. What the camera sees. If thereís a crime all we need to know is what we see. Itís redundant to tell us thereís a crime and then show us the dead bodies. Just show the dead bodies. Itís more powerful too. Just a little F.Y.I. I wonít sit here and talk... read

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