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by philbklyn on 12/16/2009

The first paragraph was confusing to me. On the second page -- Was Tabitha really older than Miss Jones? Miss Jones is portrayed well, however, the stripper that is saving up for law school sounds a bit cliched. Things started getting interesting on page 7, with the man and the suitcase. the growing suitcase was not what I expected. The POV switch to Tabitha was a little... read

Very Nice

A review of Flamingo Plaza

by philbklyn on 12/12/2009

This was a well written story and a very enjoyable read. Even though I wasn't born yet in 1948, I felt a bit of nostalgia. I liked the mix of description, action, and thoughts -- very nice. I do have to say however that it was missing a plot, and therefore made it a memoir more than a short story -- of course there are no memoirs on this site, so I will have to give this... read

short and sweet

A review of Restoration

by philbklyn on 12/12/2009

The first sentence had me yawning, but then the character's thoughts came next and it was an excellent contrast -- very nice. I liked the way you showed the character's traits without interrupting the narrative flow. The stories about the garden and the family went together perfectly, and the ending was cute. This piece was well written and interesting. This review is short... read

nuts

A review of SCORCHING

by philbklyn on 12/12/2009

The first three pages portrayed the character well, but nothing really happened. Page four started getting interesting with the finger and then the matches, but page five had me lost again. I liked the idea of going inside the mind of a psychopath, but I would have liked it much more if it happened during a story. This was a nine page psychopathic monologue that was mostly... read

not so enchanted

A review of As You Wish It

by philbklyn on 12/11/2009

The first few pages were full of description, but nothing really happening, I was not hooked. You really lost me on page nine -- I followed her all the way home for all those pages, listening to her thoughts, just to see her read a book and wish King Arthur would come and take her away, which he did -- I think. I was not crazy about this story, it took a long time and then... read

a woman's thoughts

A review of Trouble down the line

by philbklyn on 12/11/2009

In the first paragraph, I noticed quotation marks used for thoughts and a title, I am not sure if that is correct. I do believe quotation marks should have been used when she said, "sorry Mr. Earwig." I liked the part about the man pushing her arm to gain more space -- but, I didn't understand why a mars bar horrified her. I started getting bored of hearing her thoughts... read

synopsis

A review of Vicious Circle

by philbklyn on 12/10/2009

This was an interesting bit of back story, however, being told in summary form -- it felt more like a synopsis than an actual short story. It will be hard for me to rate this one, it was interesting, but there were no real scenes with characters and dialogue. The characters were portrayed well, but only through what was said and not through what was done. The writing at... read

The Library

A review of A World Of Words

by philbklyn on 12/10/2009

The first two pages were a little slow for my taste, the sun and the rain had more description than the characters. Te concept of a story from a book becoming real sounded like 'the never ending story'. The first seven pages didn't really move the main plot, I would have had one page of introduction, then the Uther book on the second page, but then the rest of the story would... read

hungry dear?

A review of The Stepmonster

by philbklyn on 12/09/2009

The first two pages were some interesting background, but the story really began with Richard. I think the son could have been called little Richie or Richie junior. The way she killed the kids and fed it to the husband in a stew was more comical than horrific. In my opinion, I think the story could be trimmed of background and rewritten, concentrating on the main storyline,... read

hell is for children

A review of H E L L T O W N

by philbklyn on 12/09/2009

These are my notes as I read: recon means reconnaissance -- An inspection or exploration of an area, especially one made to gather military information(not my definition). Destruction is another thing. It seemed like a very lucky coincidence that his age would go back to thirty five. The story was OK, but it sounded more like a video game. Usually one of my weak points,... read

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