ProfRedSweater 

member since 03/31/2011 | last login 04/19/2014

I'm a working director/cinematographer/writer operating in the low-budget scene of Seattle, WA. I've been writing scripts since 2003, and whereas I used to be focused on excluding camera movement, passive description, and the likes, I now realize that you should do whatever...

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I'm a working director/cinematographer/writer operating in the low-budget scene of Seattle, WA. I've been writing scripts since 2003, and whereas I used to be focused on excluding camera movement, passive description, and the likes, I now realize that you should do whatever fits your story best. Give me a unique story, and I'm a happy reader. My chosen genre is horror these days. Additionally I'm trying my hand at writing novels and short stories. Should be fun.

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Reviews by ProfRedSweater 67

  • by ProfRedSweater on 04/14/2014
    “The Black Rose of Mythe” has a nice flow to the writing, and I enjoyed quite a bit of the poem about the wind to start the story, but I felt like this story lacked a unique approach to the vampire mythology. It’s essentially a backstory to a main character, but Isabelle has no distinct voice, and her story fits the majority of generic vampire origins. As a result I’m left... read
  • A review of EPIPHANY
    by ProfRedSweater on 04/13/2014
    A nice quality about short stories is that they don’t have to be epic in scope. “Epiphany” is served well by that. It’s a very small story with a climax that would be severely anti-climactic in any other tale. I could arguably still be bigger, but that may just be the handling of the moment. Regardless, there’s a lot of great little personality quirks to the telling of... read
  • by ProfRedSweater on 04/11/2014
    “Children Are Building A Cemetery” could be an interesting portrait of two children who go in a very dark direction, but right now the characters aren’t complex or relatable, and the overall story doesn’t feel unique enough. What’s more the experience of reading the story is a trial, as the description is mangled by poor construction and, in general, it needs rewriting.... read
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  • ProfRedSweater on 04/15/2014

    stokerrising wrote:
    in regard to your comments about 'the black rose of mythe', this one sticks out:

    "Dialogue: There wasn’t really dialogue, but you can find Isabella’s voice in her recounting of the backstory..."

    isabelle's backstory is not recounted by her. it is told by the narrator. isabelle's voice is not found anywhere in this section of the story


    Yeah, fair enough. That wasn't phrased very well. I was searching for something to say about dialogue, since you can't exclude the category in a review even if there isn't any direct dialogue. Obviously it's a narrator telling the story, so not Isabelle's voice directly, but I felt that with the word selection we could get more insight into Isabelle and her personality, which a narrator can do and you do in the story from time to time. Still you're right, it doesn't fit in the dialogue section.

    Apologies if you didn't find the review useful, I try to spend time and give insight on everything I read while taking into account the author's intention. But intention and personal taste don't always line up from reader to author.

    All the best in continuing the story!
  • stokerrising on 04/15/2014

    in regard to your comments about 'the black rose of mythe', this one sticks out:

    "Dialogue: There wasn’t really dialogue, but you can find Isabella’s voice in her recounting of the backstory..."

    isabelle's backstory is not recounted by her. it is told by the narrator. isabelle's voice is not found anywhere in this section of the story
  • telliott on 04/13/2014

    Thank you for your very thorough review. I appreciate the time you spent on it.

    Theresa
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