a short film
by revendel
An assassination job goes wrong
I'm starting to decide to become a producer, really like reading and developing my own screenplays....
I'm starting to decide to become a producer, really like reading and developing my own screenplays.
An assassination job goes wrong
Comments About revendel 3
Tesssa on 02/27/2012
About the pan, I would just do away with it. We see enough of the room while the characters talk and move around. And even if not, the room is irrelevant for the story. My two cents :).
And... so... sorry about misjudging the age difference! It's the beard for sure! Strange what a beard does to a man's face. No need to shave it though, certainly not on my behalf!
My own work is in preproduction, an action time travel story in Valencia, Venezuela. I'm also working on a small chroma key exercise in between the work on the movie, just to see how chroma key works. It'll still be awhile though before we have anything we consider good enough for publishing.
hesgot on 09/19/2010
**DELETED ACCOUNT** on 09/15/2010
Thanks for the review. A couple of comments about your review:
A 180-page screenplay is not marketable, especially for a new writer. Typical length should be between 90 to 120 pages, as the average screenplay times out at one minute per page. A 180 page screenplay will most likely get dumped immediately on the reject pile simply because of its length.
Within the restrictions of length, character development tends to be a challenge. You have to remember that this is a screenplay, NOT a novel. It's a framework for the actors to flesh out and give humanity to the characters. The screenplay isn't the intended delivery for the story, but more like a set of instructions to construct the movie.
I am gratified you found the characters believable and want to see more of them.
Regards;
Beanbag