Halloween 1970 -- A 12-year-old boy and his friends try to maximize their trick-or-treating when Halloween falls... more
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I live and work on Long Island. I've written several novels, many poems, but my heart is in screenwriting....
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I live and work on Long Island. I've written several novels, many poems, but my heart is in screenwriting.
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Reviews by rmahler 98
A review of Blackout.comby rmahler on 12/19/2008This was an interesting concept that made for a good read. I think the dialog needed work to make it more natural and you might want to think of more ways to make the script more visual and less dialog driven, but the concept itself is solid. I'm not sure that I understand what you were trying to accomplish with the ending on the bus though. Why does Jamal fake his death?... read
A review of Principles of Buoyancyby rmahler on 12/13/2008Overall, this was a well-wrought script. The goal is clear cut from the start and the obstacles are well constructed for the protagonist to overcome. One minor mistake is that you attribute Ode to Joy to Bach (it's from Beethoven's 9th). I do have a few things that I think need addressing. First of all, I think you set up a very good conflict for Albert, but in a way he... read
A review of OLD ROTHBERGHIANby rmahler on 12/04/2008I applaud you for your valiant effort to write in what is obviously not your native language. I could not do the same. However, the fact that I could tell that it was not your native language means that it got in the way of my enjoyment of your story. You should seriously consider get a screenplay editor to read and edit your script to make it more proper English. Your... read