A dysfunctional mind
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A review of The Tailgaterby ron gannon on 01/17/2013Fun read that was easy to follow and entertaining except maybe for, maybe, a little too much torture. Well written. I’d delete the comma after pure – top of page 1. It’s not needed. The ‘white anger’ is somewhat confusing. Is that a racist comment? “With an ease Stephen only hours ago would not have thought possible, he reached into his front pocket and brought out his favorite... read
A review of Bobbyby ron gannon on 01/17/2013I had to read parts twice to figure out what was going on. Then at the ending I had to go back and read up to the ghost showing up. A very confusing read that should have been a simple one. Not much going on and a lot of poor and unbelievable dialogue. Also many times it was confusing as to who was talking. Consider using – Billy said – or – said Johnny when it’s not too clear... read
A review of Yesteryearby ron gannon on 01/13/2013I thought it was entertaining and well written. I suggest giving Amy’s age, in some way, during her visit to her grandparents. I also I was curious what state the grandparents lived in. For the most part it was easy to follow. Two sentences did confused me: ‘They could not even get free to walk safely around their homes.’ and ‘I patted and made over him.’ (the made over part... read