Reviews of Dogman 79

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  great job - haunting
  A review of Dogman
  by chalkoutlinefilms on 01/25/2008
  Great job. I read it in one sitting and have been thinking about it ever since. Great lead character. Secondary characters excellent as well. Haunting. Loved the reversal in some of the characters, especially the hispanic kid. Great details. Sense of place. Atmosphere. I only wish you had given the romance a second chance - even if it doesn't work out in the end. Also, the... Great job. I read it in one sitting and have been thinking about it ever since. Great lead character. Secondary characters excellent as well. Haunting. Loved the reversal in some of the characters, especially the hispanic kid. Great details. Sense of place. Atmosphere. I only wish you had given the romance a second chance - even if it doesn't work out in the end. Also, the ending was slightly anti-climactic for me. But that is all. I don't agree with some of the other reviewers who say they don't see this as a film. I do. Good luck with it. read
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  Dogman
  A review of Dogman
  by SerraAysen on 03/15/2005
  I enjoyed this script. I found the main character extremely well thought out and done; however, I found the rest of the characters a bit two dimensional in comparison. I would like to see them fleshed out a bit more. All in all it reads smoothly and keeps your interest the whole way through.
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  Well Placed Anger
  A review of Dogman
  by livecopper82 on 03/06/2005
  I enjoyed this screenplay alot, very simple story with characters that were well placed throughout. There was also a lot of room to explore the story, due to a slight mystery to it. The history evolves without over doing it. The inclusion of a past between the main rivals of Chris and Walt was also a nice touch, again, it wasn't over-done. I like simple dramas for the same... I enjoyed this screenplay alot, very simple story with characters that were well placed throughout. There was also a lot of room to explore the story, due to a slight mystery to it. The history evolves without over doing it. The inclusion of a past between the main rivals of Chris and Walt was also a nice touch, again, it wasn't over-done. I like simple dramas for the same reason I liked this story, just enough imagination. Every aspect used just enough to give the reader (and hopefully a director) enough to work with. read
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  Too long, good ending
  A review of Dogman
  by dbanegas on 03/04/2005
  My first comment is cut this script by at least 20 pages. It’s a simple character story of a man dealing with a ghost from his past, in this case his son. So most of the story is about the past, which means there is not a lot of forward movement. That is not a complaint, I only mean you can do the story justice in 100 pages. Regarding formatting, I was lost a few times due... My first comment is cut this script by at least 20 pages. It’s a simple character story of a man dealing with a ghost from his past, in this case his son. So most of the story is about the past, which means there is not a lot of forward movement. That is not a complaint, I only mean you can do the story justice in 100 pages. Regarding formatting, I was lost a few times due to all the flashbacks and voice overs. Make sure they are clearly labeled. I think Rina would be more effective if she were not such a coarse, one-note character. Lets see some pain and vulnerability to round her out. The writing is crisp and for the most part polished, but there are too many sentence fragments for my taste. At times the exposition is a bit choppy and cryptic. Lean is good but I want enough words for a good read. By page 70 I was finding it really hard to stay involved in the story; I think it’s mainly because it is too long. Anyway, in spite of all these comments please know that I think you are a good writer who knows how to tell a good story. The structure of this one is pretty sophisticated and for the most part you pulled it off. read
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  Turn it into a book.
  A review of Dogman
  by Kaig on 03/01/2005
  Turn it into a book. That's my recommendation. I'm giving this SP high marks in all categories, but it's just so dark and the characters are just so unsympathetic, it would shock me greatly if anyone is brave enough to make this film (or watch it). I could recommend ways to write around the graphic scenes you've included, but that would defeat the point of the story you're... Turn it into a book. That's my recommendation. I'm giving this SP high marks in all categories, but it's just so dark and the characters are just so unsympathetic, it would shock me greatly if anyone is brave enough to make this film (or watch it). I could recommend ways to write around the graphic scenes you've included, but that would defeat the point of the story you're trying to tell, so I won't. I would, however, augment Christopher's German heritage with additional or enhanced scenes, showing that this prejudice still haunts him today; and I would give him some experience with someone he knows who is prejudiced against for a physical deformity; in this way you would have the narrative developed to point where Christopher can draw the parallel between the two kinds of prejudices, but the audience can figure out his motive on their own. read
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  Dogman
  A review of Dogman
  by cane49 on 02/28/2005
  I have to say, I really enjoyed this rather long tale. Aside from a few dropped words that at times confused context, you did an awesome job and told a very good, though extremely sad story. You'll notice I mentioned long. I thought It could have been trimmed down a bit, five pages at least. Other than that, I'm really having difficulty pointing to anything specific without... I have to say, I really enjoyed this rather long tale. Aside from a few dropped words that at times confused context, you did an awesome job and told a very good, though extremely sad story. You'll notice I mentioned long. I thought It could have been trimmed down a bit, five pages at least. Other than that, I'm really having difficulty pointing to anything specific without being nit-picky. I saw no formatting issues to speak of...oh wait! Get rid of the CUT TO:s. They're not nec. Good luck with this. read
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  All muslce little heart for the Dogman
  A review of Dogman
  by ads318 on 02/28/2005
  This screenplay had a lot of strength. It was really well written, the dialogue was great, all the characters had unique voices. The structure was really nice, and the suspense could kill you alone. For me, what the script didnt have was enough meet on its bones. The characters seemed one dimensional and though they had goals, as in Walt framing Dogman, it didnt have motive... This screenplay had a lot of strength. It was really well written, the dialogue was great, all the characters had unique voices. The structure was really nice, and the suspense could kill you alone. For me, what the script didnt have was enough meet on its bones. The characters seemed one dimensional and though they had goals, as in Walt framing Dogman, it didnt have motive. Why does Christophers mother hate him, why does Rina hate him. A lot of the characters seem to do what they do just so we can end up where we need to end up in the script. Also, this screenplay is incredibly long and could stand to use some of the fat cut out of it. But its strengths really carry it a long way. There are some scenes that are really written beautiffly and as far as a disturbing, suspensful piece you hit the nail on the head... good luck dogman... read
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  good but not screenplay material
  A review of Dogman
  by tylerdurdan03 on 02/27/2005
  i did like the story and how it was written but it would just never make it to the screen. if you really want to persue this story you should make it into a novel. given the right time and effort this would acually make an amazing book. you should read the book night dogs, i forget the author but this story is somewhat realated and you give you formatting ideas.one last thing... i did like the story and how it was written but it would just never make it to the screen. if you really want to persue this story you should make it into a novel. given the right time and effort this would acually make an amazing book. you should read the book night dogs, i forget the author but this story is somewhat realated and you give you formatting ideas.one last thing i found you didnt have enough of was the insanity aspect, you should really highten christopher's insanity there wasn't enough of it in detail. read
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  Compelling concept...
  A review of Dogman
  by Jbolander on 02/24/2005
  ...and interesting story. Good solid characters, with perhaps the exceptions of Rina and Walt. Many of Rina and Walt's scenes play more like filler without really adding that much to the story. They almost play TOO bad. Their tryst in the car with Nic in the back seat, and Rina rushing out front of the house for a quick BJ just seems a bit too much. However, Christopher... ...and interesting story. Good solid characters, with perhaps the exceptions of Rina and Walt. Many of Rina and Walt's scenes play more like filler without really adding that much to the story. They almost play TOO bad. Their tryst in the car with Nic in the back seat, and Rina rushing out front of the house for a quick BJ just seems a bit too much. However, Christopher is an interesting, tortured, and disturbing protagonist. Morgan and Victor are very good supporting characters. Sheila seems to have too little screen time for us to appreciate her character as we should. Chris and Nic's relationship plays pretty well, very creepy with a few confusing moments. Nic's jumps from VO's to OS's to actually being present in the scene are at times hard to follow. Chris' trip to the graveyard with Nic's VO's (I'm cold) just seemed odd, when he "sees" Nic with him all time. Overall, a great concept that, with perhaps more focus on Chris and his relationships with Morgan, Victor, and especially Sheila and less time with Rina and Walt could be even more compelling. Good effort. Good luck! read
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  There is nothing wrong with the Dogman
  A review of Dogman
  by Clayton Cass on 02/22/2005
  I have to say, that is by far one of the best stories I've read on here. The characters are extremely well written, and they all have such great attributes. The story is interesting and entertaining, in that I never got bored with it. There was always a level of curiosity as to what was going to happen next. I was happy with the ending. I was worried as I was reading it... I have to say, that is by far one of the best stories I've read on here. The characters are extremely well written, and they all have such great attributes. The story is interesting and entertaining, in that I never got bored with it. There was always a level of curiosity as to what was going to happen next. I was happy with the ending. I was worried as I was reading it as to what was going to happen, but I was pleasantly surprised. Not that a happy ending is a bad thing, it just didn't fit with this story, and I am glad that Walt didn't kill Christopher, RIna did. That added a final surprise, especially when she realized Walt was killed to. Great story, I hope to read another one by you soon. read