Reviews of The Invisible World 6

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  A nice story
  A review of The Invisible World
  by akambitsis on 12/09/2002
  I enjoyed reading this fairy tale, I can't say it deserves to be compared to the neverending story or the princess bride yet but with some work it might. I think perhaps the dialogue, while appropriate, kind of lacked the musical and eccentruc qualities of the stories it emulates, but visually I think this would look very good on the screen. Although it is a bit more for... I enjoyed reading this fairy tale, I can't say it deserves to be compared to the neverending story or the princess bride yet but with some work it might. I think perhaps the dialogue, while appropriate, kind of lacked the musical and eccentruc qualities of the stories it emulates, but visually I think this would look very good on the screen. Although it is a bit more for the younger kidsthan say the new Lord of the Rings movies or Harry Potter, which are fine for any age, this may be good for children rather than whole families. read
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  the invisible world
  A review of The Invisible World
  by qusarus on 12/09/2002
  the first commandment of entertainment-- thou shalt entertain all of the people all of the time. the second commandment of entertainment-- thou shalt NEVER reach for the pulpit, the third commandment of entertainment---have a hard look at your target audience and give them what they want.the writer needs to follow these commandments, the most important being ---'thou shalt... the first commandment of entertainment-- thou shalt entertain all of the people all of the time. the second commandment of entertainment-- thou shalt NEVER reach for the pulpit, the third commandment of entertainment---have a hard look at your target audience and give them what they want.the writer needs to follow these commandments, the most important being ---'thou shalt not bore' read
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  Nice story
  A review of The Invisible World
  by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 12/06/2002
  I enjoyed reading this sci-fi story. It reads like a childrens story, although it´s got a deeper layer. A grandfather that has to keep on reading the book and a grandson that will die if the story is not finished is a wonderful idea. In the beginning I thought there were two seperate stories, but later on they were merged together in one in such a way that it all made sense... I enjoyed reading this sci-fi story. It reads like a childrens story, although it´s got a deeper layer. A grandfather that has to keep on reading the book and a grandson that will die if the story is not finished is a wonderful idea. In the beginning I thought there were two seperate stories, but later on they were merged together in one in such a way that it all made sense. The dialogs were pretty good. The only things that could be inproved are: more humor and if it´s a childrens story, less blood and chopping off of heads. The characters were as should be in a fairytale one dimentional. Except for the stepfather who changed somewhat. It does have a lot of religious overtones. It really reads like something you´d like to see as a cartoon or a Harry Potter kinda movie. I enjoyed reading it. read
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  What is this?
  A review of The Invisible World
  by Scotty Hawkes on 11/30/2002
  Damn, what were you thinking when you wrote this stuff? It is a lame story that preaches and makes no sense. The structure, WHERE IS THE STRUCTURE? What the hell is the grandpa doing? He is all over the place. It felt like it was 'never-ending. For your sake you damn well better make better pizzas than you write screenplays. Parts of it are sick, and the religious grab all... Damn, what were you thinking when you wrote this stuff? It is a lame story that preaches and makes no sense. The structure, WHERE IS THE STRUCTURE? What the hell is the grandpa doing? He is all over the place. It felt like it was 'never-ending. For your sake you damn well better make better pizzas than you write screenplays. Parts of it are sick, and the religious grab all over the place isn't even authentic. You haven't even uploaded the damn thing in the right format. Aren't there any professionals around here! read
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  Felt rushed
  A review of The Invisible World
  by bryanlund on 11/26/2002
  This is a good start. Could be an entertaining piece with some more work. 1) The dialog didn't feel "real". Many of the lines were very forced feeling. 2) The only times we really learned something about the characters is when they explicitly told that something to us in dialog. Perhaps the characters should be more refined, so that the character's actions, manerisms and... This is a good start. Could be an entertaining piece with some more work. 1) The dialog didn't feel "real". Many of the lines were very forced feeling. 2) The only times we really learned something about the characters is when they explicitly told that something to us in dialog. Perhaps the characters should be more refined, so that the character's actions, manerisms and speaking style reflects who they really are. read
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  Need a lot more of development
  A review of The Invisible World
  by bardo on 11/20/2002
  Is not a bad story but nothing really new. The characters needs a lot more of developement, and also a more consistent dialogues. On a fantastic history like this one i think need to be more like a "dream". The development is too rigid for a fantastic history. Keep up the good work