A father summons his bickering sons home in an attempt to mend fences before their ailing matriarch checks out
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A bogus poltergeist case turns deadly when clues lead two wise-cracking, Southern paranormal investigators to a mysterious town, a missing person and sultry 900-year-old witches who remain suspiciously young.
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by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 03/22/2011I got a kick out of this screenplay. It kept reminding me of "Ghostbusters." Rather than horror, or a supernatural ghost story, I feel it's more comedy--I giggled most of the way through it at word puns and jokes about southern accents. And in the end, except for a couple of stray dead people, all is set to rights again. It feels more of a spoof of a witches' tale than actually... I got a kick out of this screenplay. It kept reminding me of "Ghostbusters." Rather than horror, or a supernatural ghost story, I feel it's more comedy--I giggled most of the way through it at word puns and jokes about southern accents. And in the end, except for a couple of stray dead people, all is set to rights again. It feels more of a spoof of a witches' tale than actually getting scared. A couple of moments: when Theo disappears and esp when his body is discovedred, when the librarian gets toasted, when the boytoy gets subsumed, etc. do we see it's really serious--people get killed here.
Structure always gives me fits. This one feels correctly structured. You effectively use the setup to give back story about psychokinesis. All the story about the 13th St. gym, sets it up, and points to things to come, like perfume leading the way back to Mama Edna. P. 20 is the big event that kicks it up a notch, Mama Edna disappears and Mayday e-mail calls the protagonists to action. We are into Act 2. At about p. 60 the pinch, or the hook, "They ain't important now. It is what it is." Also the librarian dies in a fire. p. 66 is another twist in the plot, involves Penny and Jabez's love interest in each other. P. 75 feels like it should be the low point. Exposition about how things are going down, beginning with the clock striking midnight. P. 79 feels a little disjointed, somewhat dischordant--like the action should get underway and stay moving, but no. They have yet more planning to do. The showdown is as the clock strikes midnight, and the knives are drawn. The Realization comes when they take the witches' mirror to the vault and lock it away. Also the minor characters are moving on, new job, college. At this point we realize that all things are (nearly) set to right.
A few notes here: P. 3, "The screen Jabez lays his southern accent on thick." Is this a sentence fragment...? or am I misreading...?
P. 12 real paranormal events = the 13th St. Gym, psychokinesis, exploding light bulbs...etc. P. 23 there's something inscrutable (...or am I misreading...?)about the "don't come at night" and "...the don'ts." What did I miss here? I don't understand the joke. P.66 Isabelle refers to Jabez, "If Jabez is a witch, neither am I." Again, I missed something. This doesn't make sense. P. 113, "Just some reflections..." is cute. Good ending.
Gammon, thanks for reading and giving me your opinion about "Electra Brownfield." You didn't specify which screenplay you wanted me to read in return, so I picked your latest. If you have another in the works and want my opinion, please feel free to send me an e-mail.
by Proxy on 09/22/2008Witchton by William Gammon is a screenplay with a professional look, aside from a few grammatical oversights, while the story readers well. It is very easy to envision this screenplay as a feature length film; however, there are two major areas the writer should address if this work is to be successful. Movies involving magic, especially those set in our world, can be tricky... Witchton by William Gammon is a screenplay with a professional look, aside from a few grammatical oversights, while the story readers well. It is very easy to envision this screenplay as a feature length film; however, there are two major areas the writer should address if this work is to be successful. Movies involving magic, especially those set in our world, can be tricky because they can easily become tacky and cheesy. As for the magical and spiritual concepts within this story, I think the writer must choose between subtle and “real world” magic, such as those resembling Wiccan prayer and voodoo, or overt magic like that found in Harry Potter. In order to overcome any fakeness associated with the magic used in the story, I feel the writer needs to do a better job of introducing Jabez’s abilities in the beginning of the story so viewers feel this story is about magic. In addition, image if Harry Potter simply stated “fixing glasses spell” or shield spell; the “magic language needs worked on. Secondly, the paranormal detective agency is a little adolescent yet the two characters have resources and behave as though they are adults with a real detective agency. Additionally, I feel as though I am in the middle of a series instead of a single film. On the other hand, these “boys” seem to be quite advantaged because of Mama Edna, so the agency should be presented as the hobby of two young adults. The manner in which the detective agency and the magic are presented will determine if the concept is juvenile and cheesy. From watching “Ghost Hunters” on the sci-fi channel, I can see where adults would create a volunteer organization to research paranormal activity while using Mama Edna as a financial backer allows them to slack off. Furthermore, developing her character and relationship with the “boys” as well as their activities would help improve her presence in the story and the overall plot. Finally, I like to see a story where the writer has done some research, so perhaps a real town and real roads should be used. Moreover, this is a great start, especially for a first draft, and I see great potential for this work. read
by dbenamor on 09/22/2008Witchton Notes Hey Gammon, put off reading this for an absurdly long time, finally on board. p.7 funny intro of Monica Goode p.14 "watches her hip swing" hips swing p.19 I wrote a buddy cop movie a while back, watched a ton of them in prep. I think a really good buddy cop pair thrives on essential conflict. In Rush Hour they had totally different approaches to the job,... Witchton Notes
Hey Gammon, put off reading this for an absurdly long time, finally on board.
p.7 funny intro of Monica Goode
p.14 "watches her hip swing" hips swing
p.19 I wrote a buddy cop movie a while back, watched a ton of them in prep. I think a really good buddy cop pair thrives on essential conflict. In Rush Hour they had totally different approaches to the job, ditto for Lethal Weapon. I don't know that I necessarily get the sense here that there is a MAJOR difference between Cass and Jabez aside from one of them being horny. So far at least, they don't seem to have huge conflict between them. I think that should be something established by this point in the script. My two cents.
p.32 once too many times too the well here with the big-chested goode family.
p.40 interesting old lady sucking life out of young guy bit, has this been done before?
p.46 "Ain't your talleywhacker pointing at your belt buckle?" good line. gotta admit we're getting serious cleavage overload here, it feels like every other page someone is gawking at cleavage or it is being described. At least mix up your attractive traits. Through a nice ass in, pair of legs, long hair, somethin!
p.52 I feel like the stuttering helper dude is a little bit of a cliche
p.55 "guess you gotta be who you are" either I'm not getting this or it's contrived attempt to inject a theme into a scene?
p.56 "A)The Jeep turns takes" grammar
p.58 "The friendship is stronger than a spell." couldn't resist huh? to be fair some people will miss that, but I think you would be doing yourself a favor by leaving it unsaid and implied instead of said very obviously.
p.71 "and the silver lid fly at Elizabeth" flys
p.80 "Use it for scrying"?
p.87 one too many times too the well with one partner super-horny, other disapproving
I'm a little confused, they seemed to have a "witch fight" with the goodes, but then didn't tell mame edna? What gives?
Okay so I'm super-busy in school so forgive me and take with a grain of salt these notes because I had to read quick.
I got a little lost at the end with the mirror and the quid pro quio and whatnot. All the goodes somewhat blended together in my head.
Also this sorta society of big-chested witches kinda instantly kills this script's credibility and makes us sorta cult-movie-ish, I think it's more detrimental than funny.
I think really though the biggest issue is a lack of conflict between Cass and Jabez. That's by far the biggest problem in my book.
The witches who stay young thing is not a novel idea. I think rethinking them will not only rid you of the sorta slumming/cheesy huge boobs idea and make the concept more novel.
I read Time's Fool. I know you have talent and it shows here the characters do have voice and you get off some good lines.
Lack of conflict is killer for Cass and Jabez and makes them a somewhat dull pair. Witches kinda blend together. Edna is a fun character and I kinda like how Jabez randomly pretends to be super-southern. Cass scolding him for being horny reoccurs way too much and is one of their only sources of conflict, need more conflict!
A fast read, plot-structure wise I think it's solid.
i keep coming back to the lack of conflict between Cass and Jabez. I felt the occult elements were also lacking in imagination, I'm confident you can do better, it's fairly routine witch stuff I'd like to see something a little more novel. Add conflict for Cass and Jabez and reinvent some occult lore and you'll be in a better spot.
Your skills with detail, somewhat with characterization, and just generally in writing are evident. But remember how deep those wounds ran in "Time's Fool"? How all the characters picked each other apart while still caring about each other, recalling "Long Day's Journey into Night"? This DOES NOT have to be "Journey" but look at other buddy cop comedies, the central pair always has problems between them. It's for a reason, if they don't it grows dull. I think this could be a fine piece of work in another draft or two. Right now it's coming up short for me.
Dan B. read
by jwhedges on 09/21/2008Overall, I like this screenplay and believe that it's one of the two best that I've reviewed thus far. Also, I'd say it's probably the closest to being ready for producers and agents to read. The structure, the quality of the writing, and the pace of the story are all very good. It reads like a produced screenplay. Your action lines and descriptions, except where noted... Overall, I like this screenplay and believe that it's one of the two best that I've reviewed thus far. Also, I'd say it's probably the closest to being ready for producers and agents to read.
The structure, the quality of the writing, and the pace of the story are all very good. It reads like a produced screenplay. Your action lines and descriptions, except where noted below, are perfect.
My only critique is in the elements of the story. First, in the first twenty to thirty pages, it feels like things come far too easy to Cass and Jabez with little conflict or struggle. Everything just kind of falls into their laps. Having to struggle to figure these things out would add conflict, which I think the beginning lacks.
Second, Jabez being a witch seems both convenient and forced. I think it would add tension to take this element out, stick with psychic powers only, and leave the witching to witches. It would certainly place the outcome in jeopardy, a psychic and a telekinetic against thirteen near-immortal witches, and add a little something to the team-up with Isabella. It almost puts them at her mercy, stuck between two powerful witches and no choice but to join one to beat the other (the enemy of my enemy kind of thing).
Last (except for one nitpick), the characters are a little flat. I cared enough to keep reading, but not so much in what happened to each character. An untimely death or two wouldn't have mattered much. I think we need a little bit more background on each, them as boys under Edna's care perhaps, to get emotionally invested in them.
This one's nitpicky (I usually have one or two nitpicks in my reviews), but the devices and stuff they use in the beginning aren't used in the end, and I think that's a good thing. I liked it a lot better when they weren't using them. Those parts felt too much like Ghostbusters to me, a little cheesy.
- TENEMENT TENANT is pretty clunky. APARTMENT TENANT or TENANT would be better.
- On page 26 you describe a painting of Granny Goode as "an ancient and obvious witch." I can't think of how her being a witch can be obvious in a portrait unless she's wearing a pointy hat. I can see taking the "obvious witch" part out or replacing it with specifics about the portrait that imply she's a witch.
- I may be missing something, or it could be missing or ambiguous in the story, but the ending has me confused. Why did Isabella seemingly change plans and kill Burleigh instead of Elizabeth? There was nothing in the back story of the mirror's purpose to imply that killing Elizabeth would harm either Isabella or Cass; it's only said that harming the mirror harms the ones who've looked in it. I'm not making any rating adjustments on this one, because it could just be me; if you could explain it in a separate message to me, that'd be great.
Again, I like this screenplay overall. Of those I've reviewed, I believe this is one of only two that read like the many produced screenplays I read. Structurally, the quality of the writing, the pace, etc. are all good. I believe the only improvements needed are in the elements of story I've already mentioned and a read-through for grammar and spelling. Good job. read
by SceneIsDead on 09/19/2008SYNOPSIS ________ ACT I EVERYDAY WORLD: CASWELL “CASS” TURNER and JABEZ YOUNG, of Turner & Young: Paranormal Investigations, say their goodbyes to “MAMA” EDNA HAMPTON as she leaves for a rendezvous with the unknown BURLEIGH LORD. Each of them possesses psychic powers. INCITING INCIDENT (PG. 7): MONICA GOODE hires the boys to investigate a series of local disappearances at... SYNOPSIS
EVERYDAY WORLD: CASWELL “CASS” TURNER and JABEZ YOUNG, of Turner & Young: Paranormal Investigations, say their goodbyes to “MAMA” EDNA HAMPTON as she leaves for a rendezvous with the unknown BURLEIGH LORD. Each of them possesses psychic powers.
INCITING INCIDENT (PG. 7): MONICA GOODE hires the boys to investigate a series of local disappearances at the Thirteenth Street Gym.
TURNING POINT 1 (PG. 20): The boys receive an email from Mama Edna, asking for their help. Employees THEO FRAWLEY and GRETCHEN KNORR continue on with the paranormal investigation.
IIA: The boys drive to Pennsylvania after Mama Edna, only to get themselves lost inside a dense fog. Unknowingly, they have arrived in Witchton. Upon reaching town, they discover that Mama Edna is missing.
Theo is killed in an explosion while still investing the gym. The boys are visited by ELIZABETH GOODE, who casts an enchantment over Cass. Later, a spell sets the town library ablaze while the boys are still inside researching the Goode's family history. Instead, they find ELSPETH BAKER's personal journal. They are rescued by HD "HOWDY DOODY" GOODE.
MIDPOINT (PG. 54): When the boys are further attacked by witchcraft, Jabez discovers that he was born with magic powers.
IIB: While visiting GRANDMA YOUNG’s cabin, Jabez reveals that he cast a spell of friendship over Cass while they were children. They gather tools the necessary tools of witchcraft, and return to Witchton.
LETTY BAKER, last of the Baker lineage, is killed in the fire previously meant for the boys. It is also revealed that PENELOPE “PENNY” GOODE actually sent the email that brought the boys to Witchton.
The boys are attacked by Elizabeth over dinner, and defend themselves with their powers. The boys discover that Mama Edna will be sacrificed at a Black Wedding, in order to restore youth to this coven of witches. If not, Penny will be sacrificed in her place.
Jabez reads through the Book of Spells to learn how to kill witches by creating a Soul Mirror. Mama Edna returns to prepare for her wedding to Burleigh, caught under a love spell.
TURNING POINT 2 (PG. 90): The night before the wedding, Elizabeth casts a spell that renders the boys unconscious. Both Mama Edna and Penny are entranced, and brought to Goode Manor.
Jabez and Cass wake up, and engage in an arcane ritual to create a Soul Mirror. They are surrounded by the ghosts of Elspeth and her family, all who’ve died because of the Goode’s. They are later met by ISABELLE GOODE, who agrees to help them sneak into the wedding.
CLIMAX (PG. 106): The boys sneak into Goode Manor. There, they are met by Isabelle, who pretends to bind them through spell, only to have them seize Elizabeth. During the exchange, both Elizabeth and Isabelle are caught in the Soul Mirror.
The remaining witches bind Elizabeth through spell, and proceed with the wedding. After their vows are spoken, Isabelle makes a final sacrifice of Burleigh. The witches are thereby granted eternal youth.
RESOLUTION: Mama Edna, and the boys, prepare to leave Witchton. They are met outside by Penny and HD, who are also leaving. Penny is offered a place with the team of paranormal investigators.
The boys then meet at a bank with the Goode sisters, Elizabeth and Isabelle, and have the Soul Mirror placed inside a security box. Each side will keep a key for safety.
This Mystery/Suspense Adventure never seems to find its pace, and is betrayed by the overall misuse of tone. There is little payoff by the end, and plot inconsistencies plague the script throughout.
The dialogue suffers from the constant references to women's breasts. This same mentality is even found within the description of each Goode character, as their breast size is summarily commented upon. Overall, it gives the script a rather sophomoric feel.
The use of scene headings is often sloppy. Most notably, there is a heading which is simply labeled as "Later". Also, there are instances of repitition in the scene headings. When moving from one adjacent scene to the next, it is unecessary to keep informing the reader of the same time. Instead, try using transitions the equivalent of CONT'D.
Characters are not always labelled correctly. Two of the Goode sisters, who appear much earlier in the script, are only revealed to be so toward the very end. Simply put, don’t hide things from the reader. Also, some of the character ages are not even provided (i.e. Elizabeth Goode and Burleigh Lord). This makes it difficult for someone to cast, especially with these being major characters.
Don’t label shots in the script. An entire driving sequence is mapped out toward the middle. That is the director’s job. And, this is not a shooting script.
WITCHTON suffers from a number of technical issues. The constant references to the number 13 come across as heavy-handed. The humor is often forced, riddled with puns, and takes away from the overall tension. Clichés are used in the descriptions. The pace is slow, and would be helped if the story were significantly trimmed. Dialogue is overused, when the script would be much better served through action. That said, the story itself is very predictable. Even the clues are inserted rather clumsily.
WRITER: Pass read
by Lazzard on 09/19/2008Bits of this I liked a lot. Loadss of exciting sequences, plenty of paranormal hokum and, ever since watching 'She' as a kid, I've always had a soft spot for people growing old dead quick. And dark sinister goings on beneath the surface of a small,on the surface, quiet town are always very satisfying Some of the 'smartass' dialougue works well but a deal of it doesn't quite... Bits of this I liked a lot.
Loadss of exciting sequences, plenty of paranormal hokum and, ever since watching 'She' as a kid, I've always had a soft spot for people growing old dead quick. And dark sinister goings on beneath the surface of a small,on the surface, quiet town are always very satisfying
Some of the 'smartass' dialougue works well but a deal of it doesn't quite hit the mark and, on balance, I think there's too much.
I also found Jabez's accent a little wearing - too my mind an irritating rather than interesting trait.
And the tits thing just got on my nerves.
I would question the originality of team of wisecracking paranormal investigators - and I would definitely not use the word 'slimed'[pg77] in this context.
The opening confused me I'm afraid, the time-machine adding another element to an already complicated plot.
I understand the need to establish their 'powers' - I'm sure there must be a simpler way.
I also got a little lost at the end and had a bit of trouble identifying Isabelle's motives around pg 106.
The plot rattled along nicely and I enjoyed the ride - for my money it really picked up on pg 39 when Theo died. This seemed to raise the stakes.
One aspect that I thought was a little buried was Jabez's reluctance to 'be' a witch, something he comes to terms with during the Jeep sequence. I felt this struggle and his eventual realisation that " you gotta be what you are" could have featured a little more heavily.
Perhaps a little less wisecracking and a bit more of this....?
by videogeek on 09/18/2008I found the witch characters a little hard to keep straight. I thought it might fit in the comedy category rather than the mystery. The dialogue between Cass and Jabez felt, to me anyway, like it was geared to be a comedy. I thought the dialogue was clever but it could still use some work. The mystery part though, didn't really fell like that much of a mystery. Although... I found the witch characters a little hard to keep straight. I thought it might fit in the comedy category rather than the mystery. The dialogue between Cass and Jabez felt, to me anyway, like it was geared to be a comedy.
I thought the dialogue was clever but it could still use some work. The mystery part though, didn't really fell like that much of a mystery. Although the two main characters wanted to find Mama Edna, they weren't going out of their minds with worry. And none of the other characters (not including Penny because she knew) didn't seem to care much at all, including her husband to be. read
by David Muhlfelder on 09/12/2008I really liked this script. So much so, that any suggestions I offer can easily be ignored as personal preferences. Use them or not, I think the script works as is. The first thing that struck me was how well you established the easy rapport between Cass and Jabez. It was so obvious through their interaction in the early scenes that they were friends since childhood, that... I really liked this script. So much so, that any suggestions I offer can easily be ignored as personal preferences. Use them or not, I think the script works as is.
The first thing that struck me was how well you established the easy rapport between Cass and Jabez. It was so obvious through their interaction in the early scenes that they were friends since childhood, that I think you can cut the first scene entirely. It felt like a set up without a payoff. When you introduce something like a time machine, even a play one, in the first scene, we expect it to figure in the plot later on. If you just want to establish their relationship, those Three Stooges slaps say it all. And their dialogue was great. It was snappy but natural. It didn't feel like "banter." "Your tit parade." is a classic. Wish I'd thought of it.
Judah Ben felt a bit like a superfluous character. You did bring him back for the wedding, but he didn't seem to factor that much into the story. I would've liked to have seen Harriet, or one of the other Goode sisters that they'd already met also turn out to be the Sheriff. I just thought it would be fun to see the same characters wearing multiple hats.
Aside from the scene in the Jeep on the mountain road, and the scene in the library. I didn't feel that Cass and Jabez's life was constantly in danger. Jabez's powers seemed on a par with the Goode's. You might want to ramp up the jeopardy throughout.
The ending was a little confusing for me. I got the gist of the mirror capturing the soul, but I thought in the end all the Goode women would be old and wrinkly, because they didn't get Mama Edna's life force. But Elizabeth seemed young and beautiful in the last scene. What did I miss?
Your action lines were lean and mean. I loved "So quaint and charming you could puke." That says it all. Well done on the mechanics as a whole. Well done all around. read
by sogd79 on 09/11/2008First of all, I think you have got quite an interesting concept here. I can't say it's fresh or original, but it's still engaging and undoubtedly it's very marketable. It's like "Ghostbusters" meets "Charmed". I think this concept has a huge potential. It's not bad as the way it is now, but it could totally be a kickass screenplay. There are some many things I like about... First of all, I think you have got quite an interesting concept here. I can't say it's fresh or original, but it's still engaging and undoubtedly it's very marketable. It's like "Ghostbusters" meets "Charmed".
I think this concept has a huge potential. It's not bad as the way it is now, but it could totally be a kickass screenplay. There are some many things I like about your screenplay and your writing, but I want to mention things, which in my opinion could be improved.
You mention in production notes, it's the first draft, and to be honest with you it reads like a first draft.
The main issue in my opinion is the tone and lack of focus.(I tend to have exactly the same issue with my first drafts). It isn't funny enough to be a comedy and it isn't scary enough to be a horror and there is not enough suspense to call it mystery. And sometimes, i felt it was all over the place.
You need to decide what you are trying to accomplish: are you trying to write a supernatural drama/suspense or a comedy? You can combine these two genres, but then you will have something very Tv'sh. ("Charmed", "Sabrina, the Teenager Witch", etc).
I love the way you open the story and introduce us to the characters. The talk show scene is extremely funny. Then you start that "poltergeist in the gym" sequence and although it's interesting, you basically go nowhere with it. Well, you explain to us that it's something the witches used to distract our guys, but to be honest with you, I still wasn't satisfied. I think you should either develop it more or get rid of that sequence.
The whole "thirteen" thing was kind of cliche, like many other witchcraft rituals later in the script. I understand it's hard to be original writing a story like this, but I'm sure if you do some research, you will find more original omens, rituals, spells, etc, something which hasn't been done before.
Characters are pretty good, well developed. There are some characters you don't need. This screenplay could be more hermetic.
Overall, good job, I wish my first drafts were as good as this. Good luck. read
by Rachel.Was.Here on 09/04/2008p.27 - LATER. Just was kind of awkward to me, pace-wise, but it's not a big deal. p.28 - "Off Jabez quizzical look." What? Confusing. p.43 - "We even talked about our wedding?" just a typo. The question mark should be a . p.43 - I feel like we need some kind of reaction to the fact that the wedding is the day after tomorrow. I understand that she's been married many times,... p.27 - LATER. Just was kind of awkward to me, pace-wise, but it's not a big deal.
p.28 - "Off Jabez quizzical look." What? Confusing.
p.43 - "We even talked about our wedding?" just a typo. The question mark should be a .
p.43 - I feel like we need some kind of reaction to the fact that the wedding is the day after tomorrow. I understand that she's been married many times, but I would still think her son would be a little surprised that he hasn't heard anything about it. And even if it doesn't come as a surprise, shouldn't Burleigh feel a little hesitant to just tell him, as it should arouse a negative reaction?
p.56 - the traveling montage was random and I don't feel it was really necessary.
p.60 - this is the first time that you state Gretchen's gender, which I was confused about. Might want to mention it sooner.
p.63 - "Off Jabez' look." typo
p. 71 - "Shards fly at Elizabeth and the
silver lid fly at Elizabeth." repetitive. easy to fix.
p. 95 - the last line made me laugh harder than any line in any screenplay I've read so far.
p.96 - "With a white-handled knife, Jabez makes legs arms." another typo.
p.96 - "Jabez takes a piece of chalk. Describes a circle on the floor
that encompasses the table, himself and Cass's chair. " I don't think describes is the right word.
Alright. Now the juicy stuff. Let me begin by saying I am absolutely smitten by this screenplay. To be honest, the synopsis didn't sound great, but it truly blew me away. The wit and humor reminds me of The Mummy, and our hero's banter made me laugh harder than tulio and miguel in The Road to El Dorado. The wedding ceremony was creepy as hell, and you did a great job of developing plot and characters humorously while keeping it somewhat serious, if that makes any sense. The ending was a little...meh. Weak in comparison to the rest of the story to me. I think all it needs is a little more establishing of certain answers to all our questions. Do the witches need to make anymore sacrifices? Will they just live forever now? Is that okay? etc. But overall, this is my favorite script that I've read on this site so far. I was charmed on page one. It was almost to Goode to be true! (that made me laugh out loud.) Maybe a little heavy on the boob jokes at times, but that's forgivable I suppose. Great work, I'd really love to see it on the silver screen. Wonderful, funny, I loved it. read
- Writer: William Gammon
- Uploaded by: Gammon
- Length: 112 pages
- Genre: adventure, mystery/suspense
- Polished first draft. I could have also added "comedy" to the genre possibly, but I never know whether anyone else has my sense of humor.
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I received the first MFA in Acting awarded by Florida State University. First career: Regional repertory, dinner theater, summer stock and finally Broadway (six shows) and European tours either as actor, Stage Manager or Associate Director. Second career - free lance editor - condensing books to be recorded. Third career - Vice President of Computer Operations at a major Wall Street Brokerage. Hey, all the world's a stage. With computer skills, Vice President is just another acting role. I started writing when I was 9. I never stopped writing regardless of what I had to do to pay the bills. Now I write. The bills somehow manage to get taken care of.
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