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Cute

by shakespearesmuse on 07/10/2007

I think this script has definate potential. I wonder if it wouldn't be more fun as an animated piece. I wasn't wowed by the story, overall it was pretty predictable but it was still entertaining and had some likeable characters that an audience could get behind and root for. I got a little confused because there were so many characters and sub-plots. Like the one character... read

No Treat

A review of TRICK or TREAT!

by shakespearesmuse on 05/14/2007

The acting in this was solid, and the peice was shot and lit fine, but the story was the problem. I couldn't tell if this was supposed to be funny or if it was supposed to be scary. It turned out to be neither. The overall idea of a kid terrorizing someone around Halloween is not a bad one. The problem was in the development and the devices used to propel the story. Why... read

Cute Story

A review of Opportunity Barks

by shakespearesmuse on 09/18/2006

I enjoyed reading this script. At first I was a little skeptical because it was very similar to the plot of Fisher King, but introducing the talking dog into it took care of that. Overall I thought this was a well done piece and I think it would be a very good candidate for a lifetime movie/ movie of the week. I don't see that it is very viable as a feature. There's to... read

The Magi

A review of The Magi

by shakespearesmuse on 03/27/2005

This script just wasn't very interesting to me. The most prominent problem I would say was that the characters wern't likable. The grandfather actually bordered on extreamly creepy. No one talks that way. The dialouge got to be very cheesy in parts, and was definatly to on the nose. There was no build, no suspense. The parts that were supposed to be dramatic actually... read

Muy Bueno

A review of Buona Notte, Mrs. Probe

by shakespearesmuse on 03/11/2005

Good Work. I thought this SP was reminiscent of the genuis of American Beauty. It really was well written and the characters were well thought out. You could actually see the evolution of these people. I thought the dialouge was well written. It seems that with heavy issues like your dealing with in this story some writers have a tendancy to get either very preachy or... read

Lost at Sea

A review of LOST AT SEA

by shakespearesmuse on 10/05/2004

This was a cute script. I'm not quite sure why it had to be set in the 80's, I think it would work just as well in present day, especially considering the numerous amount of awful boy bands out there. Or maybe you could make this about the New Kids on the Block and actually have a New Kid play himself. One thing I would seriously suggest you do is reconsider your audience... read

Nice Job

A review of Drive-By Dotters

by shakespearesmuse on 07/03/2004

I think you have done a fine job on this film. It is well made and you definatly have promise as a documentary film maker. The only critisism I have is that the piece may have ben a bit to long. I started to get bored with it. I think you could cut a few minutes out and have a much more effectiv piece. Or maybe you could include some footage of the dotters getting ready... read

Good Start

A review of THE SURVIVAL INSTINCT

by shakespearesmuse on 05/19/2004

Overall this was ne of the better scripts I have read on this site. Although it did have some problems the dialouge was pretty solid and the lead character was pretty well written. It is a good shell but it needs some fleshing out. The climax needs more, and Eileen needs to fight it more. It all seems to come a bit to easy to everyone. Since the relationship between Allbright... read

Screams Student Film

A review of BR(A)ILLIANT

by shakespearesmuse on 05/08/2004

This short had kind of a clever ending, but you didn't take enough time with the set up in the beginning so it seems to me that a lot of people might miss it. I found myself going, "what is he doing?" for a while untill it finaley came together. The music is not what I would have choosen. It doesn't add much to the peice. Also the peice is too long, and there is no reason... read

Silence isn't golden

A review of CROSSROADS: (Read Synopsis Notes)

by shakespearesmuse on 03/28/2004

I watched this short before I read the production notes, and I had no idea what I had watched until that point. The message just didn't come accross clearly. The tecnical side of this film was very good, but then final cut pro and a nice camera will usually take care os alot of that for you. I would have liked to have seen and heard more of a story.

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