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  JustWright on 02/22/2011

  Stephen, much appreciated on your review for Diego Garcia. I really appreciate you taking the time to delve in and go after it!
  
  Thank you again!
  
  JW
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  olavay on 02/21/2011

  My response:
  
  “Clydell meets a cyber-criminal in jail. On the outside, instead; He robs a bank, deals in counterfeit money, a Russian Mafioso Drug Lord, and an armored car heist on motorcycle.”
  
  FYI, it was Bilal who had the interaction with the Russian mafioso, not Clydell (45-46).
  
  It’s Bonicia on the motorcycle, navigating, not Clydell. (p. 73)
  
  “Bonicia gets pregnant with twins, loses one in child birth and another in a drive-by shooting, participates in the bank robbery, goes to college, becomes a stripper to pay her step-mother's medical bills and their impending eviction, kills a competitor in a drag race, is miraculously identified from the bank video of a disguised person using a Jamaican accent by the same police officer”
  
  Also Moma Parker is not the step mother. She is Bonicia's grandmother. Bonicia's Mother dies during delivery. (pgs. 1-3)
  
  Bonicia never gets to strip, Clydell yanks her from the stage. (pgs. 51-52)
  
  Clydell kills Mears, Bilal’s henchman, not Bonicia. (pgs. 65-66)
  
  Clydell gets Bonicia the money to pay the medical bills and eviction notice. (p. 59, 69)
  
  “The characters, unfortunately, lose their accents, their identities, and their way.”
  
  I’m so sorry you got lost, perhaps a re-read will help you.
  
  I notice you're from ATL. The Dirrty Souf, the old folks haddasayin,
  
  "Nevuh grab the Cow by the tail and yank, you'll just end up with the ass of the story."
  
  Sage words.
  Thank you.
  
  The Review:
  
  Reviewed by: stephenlenane
  Re: BC 2000
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  olavay on 02/21/2011

  Thank you for the review. Appreciate the comments.

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Comments About stephenlenane 3

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  JustWright on 02/22/2011

  Stephen, much appreciated on your review for Diego Garcia. I really appreciate you taking the time to delve in and go after it!
  
  Thank you again!
  
  JW
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  olavay on 02/21/2011

  My response:
  
  “Clydell meets a cyber-criminal in jail. On the outside, instead; He robs a bank, deals in counterfeit money, a Russian Mafioso Drug Lord, and an armored car heist on motorcycle.”
  
  FYI, it was Bilal who had the interaction with the Russian mafioso, not Clydell (45-46).
  
  It’s Bonicia on the motorcycle, navigating, not Clydell. (p. 73)
  
  “Bonicia gets pregnant with twins, loses one in child birth and another in a drive-by shooting, participates in the bank robbery, goes to college, becomes a stripper to pay her step-mother's medical bills and their impending eviction, kills a competitor in a drag race, is miraculously identified from the bank video of a disguised person using a Jamaican accent by the same police officer”
  
  Also Moma Parker is not the step mother. She is Bonicia's grandmother. Bonicia's Mother dies during delivery. (pgs. 1-3)
  
  Bonicia never gets to strip, Clydell yanks her from the stage. (pgs. 51-52)
  
  Clydell kills Mears, Bilal’s henchman, not Bonicia. (pgs. 65-66)
  
  Clydell gets Bonicia the money to pay the medical bills and eviction notice. (p. 59, 69)
  
  “The characters, unfortunately, lose their accents, their identities, and their way.”
  
  I’m so sorry you got lost, perhaps a re-read will help you.
  
  I notice you're from ATL. The Dirrty Souf, the old folks haddasayin,
  
  "Nevuh grab the Cow by the tail and yank, you'll just end up with the ass of the story."
  
  Sage words.
  Thank you.
  
  The Review:
  
  Reviewed by: stephenlenane
  Re: BC 2000
  BC 2000 Review
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  olavay on 02/21/2011

  Thank you for the review. Appreciate the comments.

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