stevles 

member since 11/11/2002 | last login 11/18/2014

Have been an avid movie fan all my life. With Russ LaValle, a friend and writing partner, I've come very close to selling two scripts. But, as we all know, close is "no cigar." Like all of you, when it comes to...

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Have been an avid movie fan all my life. With Russ LaValle, a friend and writing partner, I've come very close to selling two scripts. But, as we all know, close is "no cigar." Like all of you, when it comes to writing,"giving up" is not an option. Good luck to all of us.

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Reviews by stevles 129

  • by stevles on 09/08/2014
    "When We Fell" is kind of a schizophrenic read. The action sequences, both at the beginning and end of the story are fast-paced, riveting and beautifully written. Dialogue early on matches the drama. It's when we get back home in the States where things begin to fall apart. Ben's romance with Jude is too forced and schmaltzy to be believed. Harry and Katie? Is every blue-collar... read
  • by stevles on 08/09/2014
    Written as half novel and half screenplay, Rise of the Crimson Sun isn't half bad. However, the bad, (the last 3rd of the story) drags a very good and well-written script into the ground. The super-humanized Matthew, the introduction of all new characters, trying to make sense of the madness through sophomoric philosophical discourse, Ana's needless death, the ambiguous (to... read
  • A review of 3 Days
    by stevles on 07/01/2014
    I'd like to get the typos out of the way, first. Passenger doo for "door", (pg. 24) I'm know for "I", (pg.32) Loose sleep for "lose", (pg. 45) He is wears, for he wears, (pg.49) Character names BRAVO 3, 4, etc., include the month SEPTEMBER. Make it "pass" for pay, (pg. 87) There are several others sprinkled throughout the last 27 pages, but... well, you get the idea. Finally,... read
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Comments About stevles 18

  • dkimg21 on 08/13/2014

    Your review for my screenplay is very insightful. Obviously, I made plenty of small errors, but the THIRD ACT is what I need to work on. Hopefully, I can do a good job rewriting it. And yes, I will give a heads up with the rewrite. Expect it sometime in late August and early September.
  • kamalkrishan on 05/27/2014

    Hi Stevles,
    Thank You for reviewing Sher Singh and your valuable suggestions.

    Best Wishes.
  • theauthor on 05/22/2014

    Good to see one coming back to the grind here at TSL. I really appreciate your review. It's a bit challenging to run Rivers all over the country and not have a lot of characters. I'm glad you like my style. I am working on making it easier for readers to keep up with the action, but I don't want to dilute the difficulty of the challenges. If I were British, I would set this into a Sherlock three-episode season. 'Toby' is mentioned to be a fake name along with others. I'm torn about the flashbacks. I may need to post a version without them and see. Someone will say, "I want to know about his past." I wrote a past to my characters. The next version has more of Anna's past and a bit more of Rivers too. Thanks for the suggestions.
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