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This short story wasn't half bad. I think it has a lot of potential, but I did feel it was a bit too short.
I also think for a horror story it could have done with a bit more gore perhaps, what about hearing the screams of the mother, etc.?
I also felt that the daughter going back to bed wasn't really very realistic. I think I would have preferred the daughter to tell her...
This short story wasn't half bad. I think it has a lot of potential, but I did feel it was a bit too short.
I also think for a horror story it could have done with a bit more gore perhaps, what about hearing the screams of the mother, etc.?
I also felt that the daughter going back to bed wasn't really very realistic. I think I would have preferred the daughter to tell her mother about the doll and be dismissed, or even scolded for telling lies, and then the mother coming to a sticky end! Well just an idea. Thanks for uploading.
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Well done on making another short. I wasn't sure what to make of this at first. It didn't feel too much like a comedy, although the facebook line made me chuckle a bit.
I think it was just played too straight, and that made the bit where he kills the guy feel a little odd.
Anyway, thanks for taking the time to upload.
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The shots on the sofa were way too static and the acting needed work. Also, the music didn't fit the piece too well. Finally the script on the whole was way too predictable and I think you should of got someone else to read it and give you feedback.
Hmm, that doesn't too positive so sorry for the negative comments.
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this really did drag on. It was far too much of a talky, and although it looked nice enough it just didn't seem to fulfill it potential.
The ending was a total let down, and really the short didn't go anywhere, which is a shame as it did have potential, but the script really did need a lot more work.
Anyway, thanks for uploading.
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Not badly shot, although it could have had a bit more variety with different camera angles.
The sound wasn't great, which was a bit of shame as this was a bit of talky. I must admit, I think this could of worked better as a radio play as there wasn't much visual story telling.
Thanks for uploading though.
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It's nice to see a foreign language short, as I don't seem to get many on my assignment list.
I quite liked the music, very German. I didn't quite get the point though I must admit, and I didn't understand why the guy had a nose bleed. I think you could of perhaps padded out the plot a bit more.
But well done and thanks for uploading though.
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I thought the use of sound was done very well. I especially liked the beginning of your soundtrack. I did feel however that the short on the whole did drag on a bit, and it could of perhaps been a little shorter.
The encoding was a bit of a problem too, even though the sound was good, the short lost quite a bit on this account.
Well done though, and thanks for uploading...
I thought the use of sound was done very well. I especially liked the beginning of your soundtrack. I did feel however that the short on the whole did drag on a bit, and it could of perhaps been a little shorter.
The encoding was a bit of a problem too, even though the sound was good, the short lost quite a bit on this account.
Well done though, and thanks for uploading.
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Not a bad short. The build up was quite good, but it did go on for too long and the lengthy dialogue didn't help the short.
In most other regards you did a good job though. The sound was apt and of good quality, but the encoding did let the short down a bit.
Well done and thanks for uploading.
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As a glimpse into someone else's mind and their thoughts this works very well. I think it might have been effective if there was more of a narrative, although as I said it worked quite well as it was.
The idea about bullied eyes, didn't really see to work too well. You might want to find someone else to work on your projects, if that makes it easier to get more varied shots...
As a glimpse into someone else's mind and their thoughts this works very well. I think it might have been effective if there was more of a narrative, although as I said it worked quite well as it was.
The idea about bullied eyes, didn't really see to work too well. You might want to find someone else to work on your projects, if that makes it easier to get more varied shots.
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This short was great, there were some fantastic unexpected creepy moments, that made me jump.
The effects were great as was the cinematography. I really liked the look of this film I think you did a great job with the visuals. I wasn't too keen with the missing girl shot though, as that seemed to break me out of the film experience.
Well done, and thanks for uploading...
This short was great, there were some fantastic unexpected creepy moments, that made me jump.
The effects were great as was the cinematography. I really liked the look of this film I think you did a great job with the visuals. I wasn't too keen with the missing girl shot though, as that seemed to break me out of the film experience.
Well done, and thanks for uploading.
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A review of The Doll (2nd Draft)by timhan on 11/14/2008This short story wasn't half bad. I think it has a lot of potential, but I did feel it was a bit too short. I also think for a horror story it could have done with a bit more gore perhaps, what about hearing the screams of the mother, etc.? I also felt that the daughter going back to bed wasn't really very realistic. I think I would have preferred the daughter to tell her... read
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Thanks for reading Past Life and posting the review.
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Thanks Timhan!
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+ more commentsblueboy on 11/14/2008
desisingh53 on 03/09/2008
Your review is greatly appreciated and I will consider your suggestions on CONTRACT KILLERS.
KOLOSSOS on 03/05/2008