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Tea Time!

A review of Teatime of the Apocalypse (3rd Draft)

by tromadz on 05/31/2009

First let me say I’m a reviewer who only points out the bad things, so let’s hope this is a short review. Title cards necessary? The first ten pages are odd enough to make me want to continue. Always a good thing. The formatting is pretty spot on. There weren’t any glaring mistakes at all. It was easy to read which is good for a very visual script like this. The characters... read

No smiles with these characters

A review of The Land of Smiles - Rev 1

by tromadz on 05/14/2009

The first ten pages are decent. I love how scummy Rex is. He seems to be quite the character. It takes a bit for Rex to finally get to Gik. Formatting is pretty good, nothing sticks out there. Are the supers really needed or are they there to show your cool use of titles? Gik isn’t a very innocent character. He has a point when he says he didn’t make her go to whoring... read

XXXceptional

A review of XXXposed!_(Courier font)

by tromadz on 03/24/2009

I love this title. A very interesting and quick(that’s good) ten pages. The title cards kind of get out of control though. First 20 pages, it’s funny and sexy but not much of a conflict anywhere. Anal waxing. Awesome. There are too many long blocks of dialogue. Break it up with small actions so it doesn’t seem so big. There's too much double dialogue going on. Don't... read

Speakeasy review

A review of Speakeasy

by tromadz on 01/12/2009

First 15 pages, the story isn’t there yet. There’s no speak easy yet. It’s easy to see we’re getting there, but it SHOULD be here by now. The tranny jokes just aren’t landing for me, but humor is subjective. The dialogue overall is pretty good. Natural, nice flow,etc. I like the QUICK FLASH thing. I’ve been wondering how to use something like that in a script, so I’ll... read

Reaper's a Keeper

A review of My Brother's Reaper

by tromadz on 01/03/2009

I like the title. I think there are better ways to have two characters speak at the same time than what you’ve used. It’s somewhat jarring. I get frightened easy. I’m not sure the continued’s are formatted properly, but I’ve been wrong before. I’ve never taken part in a bed race, but didn’t they already race beds before Bart’s hijacking? Are there rounds? A tourney?... read

What a tail

A review of A Boy's Tail

by tromadz on 08/07/2008

I hate when people use the word 'cliche' in reviews, but I have to. The third act suffers from it the most. Tad falling for Kelly's trick. Tommy's feelings for Tad being obvious to everyone but him\Tommy jealous at the dance. Even though this is a story about a boy with a tail, it's pretty grounded in reality. That's why Stu's suicide stunt and the demands(brock locked... read

Let the games begin

A review of Unmasked

by tromadz on 05/26/2008

I liked the opening scene. I have no idea why. I enjoyed the “what is REALLY going on here?” factor. The first ten pages got me interested, which is key. Great job there. A suggestion about the gun scene. I would suggest either leaving James WITH the “Worlds greatest dad” apron or have the bullet ring out as soon as it hits the ground. I’m a sucker for that type of... read

Surprised me

A review of The Untitled Work of Paul Shepard (2008)

by tromadz on 05/08/2008

I usually think documentary style screenplays are cheap and taking an easy way out of actual writing, but this one didn't fall into that category. This actually had a story going on with characters you care about. Was I hooked by page 10? Yeah. I was. There were no major formatting problems, which is impressive for a documentary style script. The structure was fine... read

Family Secrets

A review of Time's Fool

by tromadz on 03/14/2008

I give this a recommend. I liked the phonecall intros in the beginning. That was nice. ‘fights back unwelcomed tears’ should only be said once in the script. It’s a good line, but only once. You’re better than that. page 35 – chad heads off to join john and chad (too many chads) Page 50 and the secrets not out. Kind of Lifetime-y. Not so much conflict, if anything... read

Pretty Darn Good

A review of From Hell I Came

by tromadz on 03/12/2008

I was expecting another backwoods murderer screenplay, and while this shared a lot of similarities with most of those, this was different enough to entertain with originality. The characters were all pretty awesome. They all had their own voice and personality, and are roles actors would like to play, from Bailey to Jenkins. The story itself was good, although I didn't love... read

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