tromadz 

member since 03/01/2008 | last login 02/12/2014

Screenwriter of the produced feature film "Worth The Weight". Triggerstreet helped me grow as a writer. I like to lurk in the shadows sometimes. Please visit www.DaleZawada.com DaleZawada@gmail.com...

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Screenwriter of the produced feature film "Worth The Weight". Triggerstreet helped me grow as a writer. I like to lurk in the shadows sometimes. Please visit www.DaleZawada.com DaleZawada@gmail.com

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Reviews by tromadz 38

  • by tromadz on 05/31/2009
    First let me say Iím a reviewer who only points out the bad things, so letís hope this is a short review. Title cards necessary? The first ten pages are odd enough to make me want to continue. Always a good thing. The formatting is pretty spot on. There werenít any glaring mistakes at all. It was easy to read which is good for a very visual script like this. The characters... read
  • by tromadz on 05/14/2009
    The first ten pages are decent. I love how scummy Rex is. He seems to be quite the character. It takes a bit for Rex to finally get to Gik. Formatting is pretty good, nothing sticks out there. Are the supers really needed or are they there to show your cool use of titles? Gik isnít a very innocent character. He has a point when he says he didnít make her go to whoring... read
  • by tromadz on 03/24/2009
    I love this title. A very interesting and quick(thatís good) ten pages. The title cards kind of get out of control though. First 20 pages, itís funny and sexy but not much of a conflict anywhere. Anal waxing. Awesome. There are too many long blocks of dialogue. Break it up with small actions so it doesnít seem so big. There's too much double dialogue going on. Don't... read
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Comments About tromadz 27

  • MattyMustng on 07/01/2011

    I'm digging the avatar
  • karthig on 05/31/2009

    Hey thanks for the review. You read an old version of the script. I have since gotten rid of the child abuse and made it more light hearted.
  • RobMSF on 05/22/2009

    I like your idea for the change of ending on the adoption.

    you're right about people being a little uncomfortable about seeing a kid die at the end. Seems to be just one of those last taboos in a film.

    If handled correctly I think Heng could be a pretty memorable character. I think you may have found a really good idea there.

    As much as some people may not like it, I think in a way the best ending would be to see Heng get away with it. SEQUEL ha ha

    good luck
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