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A review of Invisible, Inc.

by victenn on 06/01/2010

Amazing story and graphics. It's definitely one of the best comics I've ever read. I think the narrative structure of the comic is its real strengh. You spend quite some time trying to figure out who the narrator is, who is the main protagonist, why are we listening to her. It's amazing how deep this story gets in the final pages. I am very very impressed by your graphics... read

Killer twist

A review of Good Fences

by victenn on 01/15/2010

Very nice story. I really enjoyed reading it. At first, I thought it was going to be simple and easy, with no major twist, but I was clearly wrong. I finished reading it with a smile on my face, happy for the suprise. I must admit I am sad this piece is so short. I could have read a lot more of it. Its not often you get to see so many psycopaths and killers. There was not much... read

Colorful

A review of Fleas

by victenn on 01/14/2010

I liked the imagery. Its totally fatfectched, and totally what you'd expect from a dream. The language was very nice too, very descriptive and colorful. I deeply enjoyed reading this piece. While reading I got this feeling of gloom, I think it was intended by the auhor as a means to show that all is not great in the woman's life. In fact, the reason for the dream is the gloom... read

Bro love

A review of Leaving The Gene Pool

by victenn on 12/07/2009

I should say out right that I liked your story, but not the ending. I think it was too abrupt. As if it was no ending at all. I do understand that the story was written like a train of thought, that at the end of the story, the thought just dies as the narrator realises what he is, and what he looking for. still, I think it could have been done differently, and better. The... read

Why?

A review of Snow or, Slipknot or, A Death Rewritten

by victenn on 09/08/2009

I'm not totally sold on this piece. I can't say it's badly written, although repetition of some words and expressions did annoy me a little. I think the author should proof read the story and try to change some sentences, so that they don't sound like the previous ones. I liked the concept of starting with the end and working your way to the beginning, "memento" style. Starting... read

When melancoly meets loneliness

A review of Silent Sigh

by victenn on 09/08/2009

Nice story. I must admit it was a bit hard to read at first, particularly because of the long sentences and paragraphs. I suggest the author amends this to make the read a little bit easier. The paragraphs look bulky on the page and doesn't incite the readers to go on. The story itself was pretty simple. Boy is depressed. Girl is depressed. Boy and Girl both go on a trip... read

Where's the rest?

A review of Cutty

by victenn on 08/18/2009

I have to say I was a bit let down by your story. you had a great premise, but the whole just ends abruptly, with so many questions unanswered. Who are theses hooded guys? Why do they all look the same? Why are they here? Is this revenge or just madness? Why on theses two guys? It would have been great if the author could have given a bit more details, be it about the main... read

Work in progress

A review of Every Tomorrow

by victenn on 08/17/2009

I am not quite sure what to think of this piece. I think the structure of the narrative needs to be reviewed. It seems that some sentences are too heavy with information. Besides, the beginning of the story is just confusing. I had trouble keeping up with present and past, and didn't know what kind of story I was reading. I liked the fact that when she remembers, she wonders... read

Great piece

A review of Amadi and the Phoenix

by victenn on 08/17/2009

I loved this story. I think it held just enough magic and fun to be a great read. The one thing i thought when reaching the end is that its too short. I think there is enough material to be build upon to write one hell of a novel. And I, for one, would love to read more adventures of Amadi and her Phoenix. I haven't got much to say about the story itself in terms of critism... read

Proofread..

A review of THE STORYTELLER

by victenn on 08/17/2009

I am sorry to say this, but you really should proofread your story before posting it. There were a lot of mistakes and missing words in the story and it made the reading experience really unpleasant. Now, to the story itself. It is clear that the object of the piece is to say how much "Dutch" has given the author and how much the latter misses him. However, I think this piece... read

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