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Flawed Chuckle

A review of What if You Were the Frankenstein

by weeman70 on 07/12/2009

There's one massive flaw in this story, Frankenstein was the doctor, not the monster. But if you push this to one side and just read the story in the manner it's intended then it really is very enjoyable. It reads very quick, the dialogue is snappy, but I was a little confused when different characters spoke in the same line. It didn't make me laugh outloud, but it did make... read

A clever lack of gore

A review of Itchy

by weeman70 on 07/12/2009

This was a story with inteligence, with wit, with power. I loved it. I felt it treated the reader with having the ability to go along with the tale, without blasting them with endless gore, in fact there was a distinct lack of gore, but then isn't that how classic horror works? It leaves just the meerest hint of what could be happening up to your own imagination to figure... read

Half Cocked

A review of Blindside

by weeman70 on 07/08/2009

I liked the descriptive language used in this piece, I had the images of the characters running in my head, and felt the seedy, grimmyness of the bar. One of the problems though was that there was not enough character explanation, I didn't know who the main character was, what he did, and therefore found it difficult to care anything for him. But the biggest problem was that... read

Dogs Dinner

A review of Dogs Best Friend

by weeman70 on 07/07/2009

I'm a little confused as to what to make of this, part of me liked the theme of the story, but another part found it smug and a little cold. For me it was saved by the ending. I felt very little for the characters, as they weren't fleshed out enough. If there was more work put into the bones of the story then it could be a good story. The characters could be fleshed out more... read

Slash Cut

A review of Body Art

by weeman70 on 07/05/2009

I loved the angle that this was taken from, the arty language and perceptions, but the best bit for me was the timeline that it took at the beginging and the way that the main character seemed to be talking directly to the reader. One thing, though, which drove me round the bend was the ending. I felt short changed, I wanted it to go on for longer, I half thought that my computer... read

Deathly Grin

A review of Death on the Number 12 Bus

by weeman70 on 07/05/2009

This piece is riddled with black humour, which although it won't make you laugh outloud, it does make you titter lightly. At first I found it confusing, I had no idea who or what the main character was, but I eventually caught on. The language was simple, if a little underdescribed. I would've loved to have had a description of Mr D's face, his clothing, maybe even a winning... read

Everybody wants to be a star

A review of Rock Bottom

by weeman70 on 11/26/2008

In intresting take on the reality Tv phenomenon, this had a high quota of black humour, which made me chuckle in parts. I did feel that the story jumped a little quickly at times from one scene to another, I could have done with a little more pre-amble, and maybe a look into the mundane existance of the characters before the show. What made them want to be on TV? Why was the... read

Dual speed

A review of It's Easier To Lose A Dog In The Desert

by weeman70 on 11/25/2008

The dialogue in the story is really good, very realistic, but then I found myself waiting for the dialogue. As that was the only time the story seemed to flow for me. The language was intelligent, but possibly overdone. Simple descriptions seemed to go on forever and that made the story drag. If the story was stripped back a bit then I think it would read a lot easier.... read

Dead network

A review of Mind Games Second Edition

by weeman70 on 11/25/2008

What a fascinating premise for a story. A futuristic take on the afterlife. Image it being like a MySpace or Facebook for the dead. I did feel that at the start, though, the story was a little cold. I felt plunged into this world with very little description and setup. I would have loved more descriptions of the world, more detail of people, just to feel a bit more of an... read

Schmaltz

A review of Santa at the Manger

by weeman70 on 02/07/2003

I found it difficult to make my own mental pictures of the script as the constant camera directions felt as if they pushing the writers own ideas upon me. I tried to read this not as another script, but as a project I would try and make, and to be brutally honest, I couldn't see it. The lead character was good and had many compeling features to his character, but maybe I'm... read

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